Jane

My goal is to use more adjectives & verbs in my writing. 4.9.2012 My goal is to move away from people who are annoying to me on the mat. 24.9 The biggest thing I have learnt in my writing so far is that if I use more adjectives in my writing my story is more intresting to me and to other people. 27.9.2012 The thing I am most proud of is in my writing I started using more adjectives and verbs because I my writing gets better every day.

28.9.2012 My goal for next term is to remember to describe most of the things in my writing. 18/10/2012/ My writing has improved because I started using better word choices. WALT:Use appropriate word choice to create impact. My mum announced "Jane you can go to the beach and surf" "OK" I replied. then I ran to the beach with my surf board. I saw a monsterous wave coming towards the beach. Next I jumped on my surf board on paddled towards the big wave.However,I turned around. I yelled as I saw the big wave callapsing on me. suddenly my mum heard noise coming from the beach. The noise was shouting HELP ME! HELP ME! My mum thought it was me and she was right. She grabbed her surf board and ran to me to rescue me. I was finaly saved.

8.11.10 My goal is to proofread my work to make it make sence.

Horses Rock! 15.11.12 WALT: proofread my work to make sure it makes sense.

Mermaids are beautiful!

20.11.12 A horses first best friend can be a cat a dog,pony,miniature horse, donkey,goat,sheep, and even a chicken.

20.11.12

My best friend is Lily.

20.11.12 I love horses.